我们用例子来说明，美国大学奖学金申请书应该如何写。

GrowingupinamodestvillageinChina,Ihardlyeverhadthechancetoseemanyexamplesofmoderntechnology;peoplewhodigwellsbyhandtoobtaindrinkingwateranduseox-drivenplowstocultivatetheirfieldsdon’thavemuchusefortelevisioandpersonalcomputers.Butwhenmyfathergavemeanoldradiotoplaywith,Iwantednothingmorethantotakeapartthecontraptionandseewhatiidemadesuchinterestingsounds.Sittingonthefloorwithaconfusedgrin,surroundedbywiresandmetal,Ilookedupatmyfatherandaskedwherethenoiseswere...(有删节)

合理地阐述了申请者学习电子工程的动机，学习动机是评审委员非常看中的。同时，读了这段文字，会使读者沉浸在对童年往事的美好回忆里，借此打动评审委员的心。

另外一篇修改过的文章开头用诗一般的语言写道(有删节)：

......IfirstreadthisparagraphfromMadameCurieasa14-year-oldchild,andIstillrememberhowwonderfulIfelt.Irememberthinking,"Whatesteemedmentheywere!Howhardtheyworked!"AsIgrewolder,thisparagraphbecameasourceofencouragementinthefaceofadversity.Ibegintofeelamagicalbluelighttwinklinginmyheart,kindlingaloveofscience,andencouragingmetochargebravelyintotheunknownworld.

结尾呼应了开头，阐述了作者为什么要去美国读书：

Ineverforgotmyadolescentidol,MariaCurie.AsIre-readthebook,anotherpaageleapedout:"Shewasnow24-anagewhensomeofhergreatcontemporariesweretobeonthebrinkofmajordiscoveries...MariatookthetrainfromWarsawtoParis,theintellectualMecca."

Forme,theintellectualMeccaistheUnitedStates....Ihopetocontinuemystudyandresearch,asdetailedbelow.Oneday,Ihopetofindthepureestheticsofbiologyandreachitsluminoussummits.

我们可以想象地到，评审委员在读了这位女士的申请文章以后，脑海里肯定能栩栩如生地浮现出一个好学上进、充满远大抱负的未来女科学家的形象，怎么会不拍案叫绝，全力帮助这个女士登上前往学术圣地美丽坚的飞机，成为第二个居里夫人呢。